How to Revise Your College Admissions Essay | Examples
Revision and editing are essential to make your college essay the best it can be.
When you’ve finished your draft, first focus on big-picture issues like the overall narrative and clarity of your essay. Then, check your style and tone. You can do this for free with a paraphrasing tool. Finally, when you’re happy with your essay, polish up the details of grammar and punctuation with the essay checker, and don’t forget to check that it’s within the word count limit.
Remember to take a break after you finish writing and after each stage of revision. You should go through several rounds of revisions and ask for feedback on your drafts from a teacher, friend or family member, or professional essay coach. If you don’t have much time, focus on clarity and grammar by using a grammar checker.
You can also check out our college essay examples to get an idea of how to turn a weak essay into a strong one.
Big picture: Check for overall message, flow, and clarity
In your first reading, don’t touch grammatical errors; just read through the entire essay to check the overall message, flow, and content quality.
Check your overall message
After reading your essay, answer the following questions:
- What message do I take away from my essay?
- Did I answer the prompt?
- Does it end with an insight, or does it just tell a story?
- Do I use stories and examples to demonstrate my values? Do these values match the university’s values?
- Is it focused on me, or is it too focused on another person or idea?
If you answer any of these questions negatively, rewrite your essay to fix these problems.
|You tell a story without insight
|Add a lesson learned and actions taken as a result of this lesson.
|You claim to have qualities without proof
|Add detailed stories that demonstrate these qualities.
|You write mostly about another person or idea
|Elaborate on how this person or idea affected your perspective, actions, and future goals.
Check transitions and flow
Underline every paragraph’s topic and transition sentence to visualize whether a clear structure and natural flow are maintained throughout your essay. If necessary, rewrite or rearrange these topic and transition sentences to create a logical outline. Then, reread the entire essay to check it flows naturally.
Check for content quality
Highlight any parts that are unclear, boring, or unnecessary. Afterward, go back and clarify the unclear sections, embellish the boring parts with vivid language to help your essay stand out, and delete any unnecessary sentences or words.
Make sure everything in the essay is showing off what colleges are looking for: your personality, interests, and positive traits.
Voice: Check for style and tone
To ensure you use the correct tone for your essay, check whether there’s vulnerability, authenticity, a positive and polite tone, and a balance between casual and formal. Ask yourself the following questions:
- Does the essay sound like me? Do my word choices seem natural?
- Is it vulnerable? Do I write about myself in a way that demonstrates genuine self-reflection?
- Is the tone conversational but respectful?
- Is it polite and respectful about sensitive topics?
|Your essay doesn’t sound like you
|Your essay doesn’t show vulnerability
|Your tone is too casual
|Your tone is too formal
Read it aloud to catch errors
Hearing your essay read aloud can help you to catch problems with style and voice that you might miss when reading it silently. For example, you may overuse certain words, have unparallel sentence structures, or use vocabulary that sounds unnatural.
You should read your essay aloud several times throughout the revision process. This can also help you find grammar and punctuation errors. You can try the following:
- Read it aloud yourself.
- Have someone read it aloud for you.
- Put it into a text-to-speech program.
- Record yourself and play it back.
Details: Check for grammar and punctuation
After checking for big-picture and stylistic issues, read your essay again for grammar and punctuation errors.
Run spell check
First, run spell check in your word processor to find any obvious spelling, grammar, or punctuation mistakes.
Punctuation, capitalization, and verb errors
Check for common sentence structure mistakes such as sentence fragments and run-ons. Throughout your essay, ensure you vary your sentence lengths and structures for an interesting flow.
Be consistent with your use of contractions, acronyms, and verb tenses.
Whenever you reuse an essay for another university, make sure you replace any names from or references to the previous university.
Feedback: Get a second opinion
You should get feedback on your essay before you submit your application. Stick to around two to three readers to avoid too much conflicting advice.
Ask for feedback from people who know you well, such as teachers or family members. It’s also important to get feedback on the content, tone, and flow of your essay from someone who is familiar with the college admissions process and has strong language skills.
You might want to consider getting professional help from an essay coach or editor. Editors should only give advice and suggestions; they should never rewrite your essay for you.
Have your readers or editors answer these feedback questions:
- Is the introduction catchy and memorable?
- Do I include specific stories that demonstrate my values?
- Are there smooth transitions between paragraphs?
- What message did you take away from my essay?
- What parts were unclear, boring, or unnecessary?
- Does the essay sound like me?
- Is it vulnerable? Does it demonstrate genuine self-reflection?
- Does it have the appropriate tone?
- Is my humor (if any) funny?
Everyone needs feedback—asking for help doesn’t mean you’re a bad writer. A fresh pair of eyes might notice things you have missed.
Get help from a teacher, guidance counselor, or mentor
You can ask for feedback from a teacher who is familiar with your writing, preferably your English teacher, who can help you with narrative, flow, and grammar:
- Familiar with your writing
- Has good knowledge of narrative essays, grammar, and style techniques
- May be overwhelmed with other students asking for help
- May not be familiar with the college essay writing style
You can also ask your school’s guidance counselor, who should have specialist knowledge of what admissions officers look for in a college admissions essay:
- Has good knowledge of the college application process
- Most likely overwhelmed with other students asking for help
- May not be familiar with your writing or personal background
Ask your teacher or guidance counselor for help at least one to two months before the submission deadline, as many other students will also want their help. Give them at least three weeks to review your essay.
You can also ask another adult, such as a mentor or coach who supervises your extracurricular activities:
- Knows your background well
- May not be familiar with the college essay writing style
- Might not be a strong writer
Ask family or friends to check for authenticity
Family and friends can be a good resource for checking that your essay sounds like you. However, for more comprehensive feedback, seek help from family with a strong writing or English educational background. You can also ask older siblings or cousins who have successfully completed the college admissions process.
- Familiar with your background, personality, and key life moments
- Can help you identify whether your essay has authenticity and vulnerability
- May be unqualified to edit your essay
- May give subjective advice to avoid hurting your feelings
- May be difficult for you to receive unfavorable feedback from someone close to you
Hire an essay coach or editor
After receiving feedback from your close network, you can also get help from an essay editor who can give you objective expert feedback.
- Has specialized knowledge of college admissions essays
- Can give objective, high-quality feedback on your content, tone, and grammar
- Unfamiliar with your background and personality
Incorporate feedback after a break
After receiving feedback, take a break for a few hours or get a good night’s sleep. Then, come back refreshed to incorporate feedback.
Depending on your writing, you may undergo multiple rounds of revision. Save each draft of your essay in a separate document, in case you want to borrow phrases or ideas from a previous draft.
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Frequently asked questions about college application essays
- What should I check for when revising my college admissions essay?
- Whom should I ask for feedback on my college essay?
Teachers and guidance counselors can help you check your language, tone, and content. Ask for their help at least one to two months before the submission deadline, as many other students will also want their help.
Friends and family are a good resource to check for authenticity. It’s best to seek help from family members with a strong writing or English educational background, or from older siblings and cousins who have been through the college admissions process.
If possible, get help from an essay coach or editor; they’ll have specialized knowledge of college admissions essays and be able to give objective expert feedback.
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